An Injured Experience-Draft 1
When I was a little girl, an accident happened to me. That day, I played with my younger sister in the park near my home. Afterwards, I competed with her in running. I was fill with self-confident that I would win, but I slipped and fell over. Suddenly, my chin was in great pain. Then I saw much blood on the ground. Formerly, my chin was losing lots of blood. I was too painful to say anything. At the time, my parents came out and were amazed why I got hurt. They took me to the hospital quickly. The doctor operated on me to suture my chin's wound. After that, I always act carefully for fear that extreme pleasure should be followed by sorrow.

3 Comments:
It must be very hurt.
so terrible!
" I was fill with self-confident that I would win,"-->"be filled with "或"full of "
It is really terrible and pain.
You wrote well,and I think that you can make your sentences longer.
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