Autobiography-1-Draft Two
My name is Chen-Yi Chu. I was born in Tainan. I am a seventeen-year-old girl. And I am studying in National Tainan Commercial Vocational School. I have an English name called Jenny. There are four members in my family. My father is a kind and down-to-earth person. My mother is a career woman. She works in a beauty parlor. My younger sister is a senior high school student. She learns handicrafts in school. My family fills with warm and fragrant. I hit it off well with my family. When I was chapfallen, they would speak some words to cheer me. I love my family very much.
I am responsible for doing everything. It gives me great pleasure to help those who need help. I am interested in English. I spend much time promoting the four skills of listening, speaking, reading, and writing. I love to play the flute, draw some illustration, play badminton, and listen to classical music. I used to be a member of the class of wind music in junior high school. I learn to team up with our wind. I consider drawing as a great way to work off my mood. I can control my mood efficiently. The former helps me relieve my pressure and the latter makes me become more artistic.

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My name is Chen-Yi Chu. I was born in Tainan. I am a seventeen-year-old girl, and I am studying in National Tainan Commercial Vocational School. I have an English name called Jenny. There are four members in my family. My father is a kind and down-to-earth person. My mother is a career woman, and she works in a beauty parlor. My younger sister is a senior high school student, and she learns handicrafts in school. My family is filled with warmth and fragrance. I hit it off well with my family. When I was chapfallen, they would say something encouraging to cheer me. I love my family very much.
I am responsible for doing my jobs, and it gives me great pleasure to help those who need help. Besides, I am interested in English. I spend much time promoting the four skills of listening, speaking, reading, and writing. Furthermore, I love to play the flute, draw some illustration, play badminton and listen to classical music. I used to be a member of wind music in junior high school. I learn to team up with our wind. Also, I consider drawing as a great way to work off my mood, and I can control my mood efficiently. The former helps me relieve my pressure and the latter makes me become more artistic.
* 第二段描述過多的點,反而模糊焦點,過廣卻沒有深度描寫。
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