My Bedroom-Draft One
My bedroom is simple organized. When you walk into my bedroom, a large window is on the opposite side of the door. My bed is under the window in the right corner. On the right of door, there are my desk and chair that use to study. A lamp put on the desk. The bookcase, which make a collection of my favorite books, is between the bed and the chair. On the head of bookcase is a clock of cute pictures. The clothing case is directly on the left wall near the door. At the end, a television is in the left corner. They are pretty well organized, so I am jealous of my bedroom so much.

6 Comments:
"On the right of door"
maybe you should chang into
"On the right of the door"
*My bed is under the window in the right corner.*
in should change to on.
*there are my desk and chair that use to study.*
This sentence you use R.C is good.
"The bookcase, which make a collection of my favorite books, is between the bed and the chair."
You should change "make" to "makes".
"On the right of door"should change to "On the right of the door."
"The bookcase, which make a collection of my favorite books."
should change to "The boodcase, which makes a collection of my favorite books.".
It is good that you have a TV in your bedroom.
I think you must not be affected.
I don't know what I can correct.
any mistake that I can find had been corrected.
It is a good article.
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